From 1-10 please rate my story poem ...?

Well, you wont pick up any ladies with this poem, however there is a form called "slam poetry" and this fits right into that catergory. Slam poetry is usualy read aloud with alot of emotion and breaks. Is it going to ever be published... no... however it is not a bad poem and well thought out reguardless of what I think of the topic. I think you do have some form of tallent its a matter of getting away from the wise cracks and into a real topic that will get you somewhere. Good luck. I give it a 5